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A Proper Detention Fic
By shiv5468
So, this is one of the Classics of the ship, and I can't think of one that's really well written. So the challenge is to write The Detention Fic, the one that everyone will still be talking about in two years time, and will be standard by which all Detention Fics will be judged. These requirements were worked out by me and my Friends on my Livejournal – so it's a pretty comprehensive list.
So, the basic requirement is that Hermione shall have Detention with Snape and be shagged into the middle of next week.
The second requirement is that it should be hot enough to melt the screen, and if it is printed out will cause the paper to spontaneously combust.
To avoid the issues about the morality of student-teacher sex, it is almost her last day in school, and the exams are over and marked. (Unless you want to explore that dynamic of course).
My personal preferences on this are:
1. Hermione shall not trip along to the detention in the expectation of a shag. She will be expecting detention. She is most likely rather annoyed about getting detention. This will mean she gets a Lovely Surprise. She will also be attending wearing all her underwear, and regulation robes and skirt length.
2. The Detention will not consist of Professor Snape getting Hermione to bend over to clean a cauldron such that he can ogle her firm, ripe, melony, pert, cute, rounded, whatthehellever buttocks. Nor will there be a cliched sentence about Severus realizing that Hermione has grown into a woman, with accompanying descriptions of "curves in all the right places".
3. The sex will be physically possible. Severus will be a normal length and size and colour. There should be no extra pairs of hands, impossibly long fingers reaching into wombs. There will be no kissing until the parties are unable to breathe – that is what noses are for. If necessary draw a diagram and work out who is doing what to whom, and how. Illustrations are always welcome, for those who like to draw.
4. Hermione will not be a virgin, therefore she will not be shocked at what she finds under those robes, although she may be pleasantly surprised. Neither will Severus be a virgin. We don't need to know who their previous shags were, and there shall be no references to Ron didn't manage to make her feel like this (even though I've done that myself). Severus is however a Sex God, otherwise what is the point. (Unless someone fancies a comic version, hmmmm, maybe I'll write one.)
5. Hermione still has frizzy hair and not cascading curls. Severus still has a big nose. His hair might not be greasy – as he could have had a wash before the shag – but it will not be silky close up, gosh, everyone has been wrong about his hair all along.
6. Forbidden Phrases. There will be no:
· feminine cores;
· throbbing manhoods, rods, shafts, or anything that sounds like it belongs on a car.
· Purple-headed love-mushrooms;
· Shutters - they are large wooden objects on houses, and nothing to do with sex at all. Shudder is allowable but why not try something new – trembling, shivering, quivering, quaking, etc;
· No Sev, Sevvie, Sevviekins, Greasy Git, Know-it-all, overgrown bat – I'm tired of seeing them;
· Severus will not announce to Hermione that she is so hot and tight, when sliding his throbbing manhood between her slick folds (and there's another, no slick folds, in fact no folds at all); and preferably should not announce that she is all wet for him, unless this is done with style and flair. Some authors have managed to do this; most haven't;
· No releasing a breath she didn't know she had been holding;
· Neither should Hermione lap up his ejaculate eagerly, and he definitely shouldn't be lapping up his own ejaculate - some of us read this stuff in the mornings and eat porridge and that kind of visual can result in people being unable to write smut for simply weeks
[/size]Closing date: 18th July 2004. If you miss it, post anyway.